March 17, 2011
Is my grammar in this ok?
Doesn't need a thesis. Just using this to see if there are any grammar rules I need to work on.
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Accutane is essentially a form of vitamin A. It's prime objective is to reduce the operation of oil glands, often permanently, thus reducing the quantity of and preventing nodulic pimples from forming. The drug intends not only that, but the reduction of active nodules as well. The many who seek this drug are not always exclusively in regards to acne vulgaris depletion, but prevention of prominant scarring as well.
While accutane is the most effective nodulic acne treatment, it is one of the most dangerous and caution-required drugs in terms of drugs. These precautions, if contrived legally, are unmissed. It is very difficult to recieve this drug.
There are side effects for every drug, but accutane's are more occuring than in most drugs. This factor has the FDA very cautious about this drug, as they should be. Side effects may include: Thinning of skin, depression, severe dryness, hairloss, pink eye, loss of vision, nose bleeds, joint pain, nail changes, liver damage, hearing impairment, psychosis, violent behavior, decreased white blood cell count, raised cholestorol, ect.
I'm currently enrolled in my second treatment now. Through these two treatments, I've experienced: depression, severe dryness, loss of vision, nose bleeds, joint pain and raised cholestorol. While I can perform physical activity, I become sore much easier. Minimal physical activity can cause me to go soar for one to three days. I've been enduring this a lot lately, and it has been restrictive to my health. I've had to constrict food intake to make safe that I don't gain any weight.
Filed under Vitamin Acne Treatment by omercoil



Comments on Is my grammar in this ok?
Rewrite particular sentences in my words…
1. Cohesiveness…"Seeking this drug is not always exclusive to acne vulgaris depletion but the prevention of prominent scarring as well"
2. Flowing…."While accutane is the most effective nodulic acne treatment, it is one of the most dangerous and requires the most caution. It is very difficult to receive this drug. Accutane's side effects are more than most drugs. This fact has caused the FDA to be very cautious about it, as they should be"
3. Grammar…"through these two treatments I've experienced" (no comma needed)
4. Spelling…."Cholesterol"
5. Grammar, Spelling…. "Minimal physical activity causes soreness for one to three days"
6. Spelling…."I've been enduring this alot lately" – (not "a lot" but "alot")
7. Grammar…"I've had to constrict food intake to safely prevent from gaining weight"
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